Yeah sorry, I rushed a bit towards the end and I don't think what I was trying to say was completely clear.

I definitely agree that a forced / unnecessary theme can be really cringey. Like in Jurassic World, it seemed like they were trying to have a message about military? I don't even know, that movie was horrible.

I think what you are saying is true to noticeably forced themes, but I dont think that has to be the case. Also you can have a theme without a message. A theme is just a concept / idea connecting everything. You can probably find a small theme in your original writing, and develop it if you chose to change this story. In that case it wouldn't be forced / feel inorganic.

Also imo you can completely ignore all of what I just said(its just my flawed opinion anyway), and achieve the exact same thing by focusing the story more on the characters.

In my original post, I was just trying to say that it felt like you were reporting an event in prose, and there wasn't really much for me to connect to. Feedback in general is more valuable for the identification of problems in your story, than it is for the solutions people will give(especially mine.)