Can you guys evaluate my claim for a Crucible Writing assignment?

Take out half the words. Each topic sentence should be max a dozen words. You're not talking about complex ideas here. You're talking about people lying in a book that is basically a Sunday school morality tale foisted on poor students in "English" class because evidently we need a way to teach kids civics. Do we end up teaching much about literature in them?

Anyhow, claim should be something like "... [F]ear ... motivates ... Salem to make false accusations."

TS: Abigail falsely condemns Elizabeth as a witch.

(Subtopics: truth of allegation, subject of allegation, substance of allegation, motivation, etc. not to be halfway shoehorned into the TS)

TS: Mary falsely condemns John during trial.

(Subtopics: same as above)

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