Could someone please take a look at my cover letter?

Hi there....I tightened up your cover letter and changed a few words. I really think you should sell your awesome volunteer experience, so I put it at the top. And also keep in mind HR managers are lazy and don't want to take the time to read cover letters so always add bullet points in your cover letter. It's been working for me (I'm looking for work in digital marketing) Hope you like it!

I wish to apply for the child protection position for <company name>. From the time I was in high school, working within child protection has been my true passion. My education and experience volunteering at an orphanage in the Philippines was truly a life-changing experience, and inspired me to pursue a career as a child protection practitioner.

I am enthusiastic about improving the future of families and children within our community, and confident you will be impressed with the skills and knowledge I have acquired to become an invaluable asset to your team of practitioners. I am currently studying an Applied Social Science degree at ...* and have completed the following units:

• Developmental Psychology • Credit Introduction to Contemporary Society • Distinction Counselling Skills • Distinction Positive Psychology
• Credit Psychology of Health and Wellness • Distinction Social Systems • Legal and Ethical Frameworks Distinction

I am confident, self-aware and aware of others, resilient, able to keep calm under pressure, organised and a quick thinker. I have strong administrative skills as an executive assistant and have proven my ability to work collaboratively with external and internal stakeholders.

I am available by phone or email at your convenience to discuss further and look forward to hearing from you.

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