[FEEDBACK] Psychosis (Sci-Fi/thriller/horror) work in progress

yea i had a pretty shitty day yesterday. it was a playful rant. well supposed to be playful. didn't it come off as playful?

the guy is right. i need more experience. i need to work harder. i want to work harder.

i also have a confession to make...

to be completely honest the whole reason i composed a rant is because my sherlock sense went off when i discovered that windsor_1968 came out of no where. brand new reddit user. and by happen-chance his very first comment/post was to drop some harsh truths on me. which in turn lead me to think that windsor_1968 is very likely a fake account someone on this sub created to bust my bubble (so to speak)

now you are a suspect :)

you will deny it, never admit it plus there is another suspect im going to interrogate ;)

maybe i needed my bubble busted. maybe i was just reaching because i couldnt handle the truth. nobody can handle the truth

but it's whatever...

im trying to pump myself up. i have to rewrite everything from scratch. something doesnt feel right. namely the fact that a trained spy is throwing a childish tantrum because one of his ex girlfriends is fucking with him. going to cut that bit out and FADE IN straight to the self driving vehicle. protag on his way home from a long days work preparing to be an astronaut. i arrived at this by objectively analyzing my own work. so obviously i have my work cut out for me....

and it shouldn't matter who windsor_1968 is. harsh truths are harsh truths. no easier to swallow no matter who they came from.

but my curiosity gets the best of me sometimes.

i wonder why whoever created windsor_1968 didnt log back into the account to accuse me of spitting on someone who is "only trying to help"

perhaps said someone forget the password they used ;)

i also wonder why windsor_1968 hasn't been more active since his last post. maybe something happened to him. he lost interest. maybe mission accomplished. but there are surely lots of other aspiring writers in this sub he can help out. i cant be the only one on the level worthy of his attention?

im playing, obviously.. i really dont care either way...

and to your defense from what i have seen in your recent activity you actually take the time to provide feedback for other users in this sub provided said writer puts in enough effort. Vietnimization. you also got called out for it and had a brief argument with another user. perhaps you agreed with my assessment and merely looked to see what kind of writing i was capable of.

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