[General] The Village Of Tailors

Hi, there are some interesting images in this but it is *very* hard to understand for me. There are a couple of lines that I can't parse at all such as "Many consist my avers" -- is that something more than word salad? Then there are some that kind of make sense but seem to be non-sequiturs, e.g. "My recall of the hamlet ever goes with a nome".

I would have a think about what you're actually trying to say. To pick an example at random, "yonder" doesn't fit in the last line. If you replace it with "over there", does the line make sense? Lay off that thesaurus and let that dictionary be, to paraphrase Johnny Cash ;) It's fine to use heightened imagery and archly poetic language if you do it deliberately and with a purpose in mind but you need to communicate with the reader too. Sorry if any of that sounds harsh.

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