Help me write a poem?

first of all, your form is really good. The way you have it could work just fine.

Here is a quick re-write though, perhaps it will stimulate some synapses :)

comma's are short pauses, hyphens longer pauses, and slashes are even longer pauses:

Hello Reader, hello Friend,

I was writing, now you're reading - now we're making /

Making a balance, a barrier - now we're creating /

A barrier public & narrow - a barrier created by art /

A barrier narrow & more narrow - but a barrier bridged by art /

Created by art, bridged by art - now we're making

A new experience /

A new experience everyday - everyday we're making something new /

We're making equal access & equal tools,

Joining bridges, buildings towers of new confidence -

Art is never lacking because Interpretation is never lacking -

Because YOU are never lacking /

Even if we can't interpret or engage, even if we read once and then choose to move elsewhere,

When we ignore we build language /

When we interpret & reply we build language /

Engage and you gain discussion, building participation -

Our art is made of participation, frustration, intimidation, wrongness /

Our art is made of blurs becoming buildings -

Of languages falling down & re-assembling, by YOU -

You, the creator,

You, the interpreter /

Even blurs are something, even blurbs are something -

Never something out of nothing, there is always something /

Interpreting -

Something out of something, building art out of gaps and bridges,

Building persona's out of new language -

There are no magicians behind the curtain,

Only more artists, building bridges to somewhere /

Something out of something /

Blurring language via persona, building persona via language /

Curating gardens of narrow spaces, still ecstatic in limitation /

The public is an artist -

Your eyes are an artist -

My hands are an artist because

Our movements are always brand new -

Brand new museum critics, art dealers, thieves & buyers

Museum gatekeepers and museum security guards -

Art is build from narrow spaces, bridges spanning narrow gaps /

YOU, dear reader, you are access, you are freedom -

My hands shaping clay, my pen stroking page -

We are freedom from isolation /

YOU, are freedom from isolation /

We are all access, our bridges connecting isolated islands,

Our bridges connecting schools & childhood, adulthood & frustration /

Narrow gaps of time, narrow spaces of languages -

Being built and torn down and built again,

Using the rubble as a new cornerstone, using time

As a bridge to & from isolation /

Mentioning my work to the sky & denied

Access /

Mentioning my work to a reader & creating

New bridges /

No artist works alone.

/r/OCPoetry Thread