Hey there, a couple things to note. For me, there's too much white space. While resumes don't necessarily want to look too busy, I think yours looks too empty.
Notice the margins that are very wide because your bullet points move the text inward.
Your contact information takes up too much space and I'm not particularly a fan of how it's not centered. Doesn't give a "title" like feel to it.
With regards to formatting, I think it's important to emphasize that you should work to hug the margins — not avoid them. It just gives the aesthetic of being too empty otherwise.
As a result, when I see the resume, my gut feeling is that there's nothing on here, whereas that's not necessarily the case.
Moving on from the aesthetics, let's look at the content. Starting with education, I think there's some unnecessary information in here or it's not really framed in the right way.
For the first one, I assume knowing DDM, DCF model, etc. is important for what you're applying to. Put it into the context of a class. For instance:
The second bullet on your resume is unneeded. It doesn't tell me anything. Better to frame it in the context of your classes than it is to just say "I am a good student."
If you don't have the best grades in class to show off your coursework, just remove the bullets. Keep it simple. Education, GPA, graduating date.
Let your work experience speak for you, which you have a fair amount of.
With your first job, reword so it makes it a bit more realistic. Were you really personally managing a cash sale to a firm? Or were you helping out? Embellishment is fine but there's embellishment and then there are empty statements that everyone can look through.
Perhaps reword it to something like this:
Keep the rest of your resume in line with that sort of tone. Embellished but realistic. And always remember that if you can, show action to result. Meaning, if you say you did something, tell me what the outcome of the action was.
And some things on your resume sound kind of cringey. Like this:
The only intern in Company history to produce a timely and thorough financial analysis of a £Figure real estate investment project. The project was presented to the Managing Director, resulting in increased interest from Company to pursue the project.
It sounds so much cleaner and mature with something like this:
"Produced financial analysis of $VALUE real estate investment project; pitched to Managing Director, resulting in Company moving forward w/ the project"
And I think showing more extracurriculars would really be to your benefit. It shows you're more than your work and assuming you've graduated recently, it can really help you if you don't have a big brand name firm on your resume.
Hope this helps! I'd really appreciate it if you could critique my resume in return. Thanks!
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