I just finished my first ever script

Technically this is a script if you're just going to read this word for word as a voiceover for your channel, but this is not a screenplay or really what this sub deals with.

If this is only intended to be used by yourself for your YouTube channel then fine - you've had success on there, you're probably better placed than most on this sub to decide whether it "works" as content.

If your intention is to frame this into a properly formatting screenplay with a narrative then there's far too much needed for anyone to be able to advise you on here - you will have to learn how to write a screenplay like everyone else. Read professional screenplays, read this sub, there are lots of websites and resources online with how to write one and of course many books on the subject.

This isn't a quick thing you can learn in a couple of days.

I would just identify exactly what you intend to do with this. As I mentioned, if it's just going to be read as a voiceover on an upload, or as you say, sent out in various emails to your subscribers then it's probably fine as is and just needs refining.

I'm sure you have a circle of friends/collaborators who can take a look at it and give feedback? They will know your audience better than anyone on here. Ask them if it is interesting or whether certain parts need editing/removing/improving.

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