Performance

Okay, wow. This is especially poignant right now. It's always been so, but it is now that I've become aware enough to appreciate it. The theme of the work is very clear and your metaphors work perfectly with what you're trying to convey, about meaningless words of accusation in the face of massive injustice. I love the candle metaphor and the subsequent callback with a thousand candles.

What doesn't work for me is that I can't find a particular flow in the structure of each stanza and the poem as a whole. Each stanza seemingly has a different rhyme scheme that holds true for a few lines and then disappears, and this really takes me out of the poem and makes it less cohesive.

/r/OCPoetry Thread