The Seductress' Ballad

I like that you arent afraid to get sexy, i think its safe to say dis a poem bout the sexy side of love. I read it as the narrators perspective of the ocean, with a lot of pumping and bumping from the waves and surf. The ocean is can be alluring, and steal folk from their partners, and steal the hearts of those so inclined. And theres lots of visual metaphor to play with. And theres a tongue in cheek kinda word play throughout (you cant but fuck her might be a little too funny to work, but i actually like that line so idk maybe the rest of the lines should try for more direct humor like that) But some lines felt out of place, and i have a hard time understanding the tone. The line

Again i mount you with no restriction

Felt like not nearly as poetic as something like

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