I’ve rewritten my tv pilot, it’s called Dark Web, and I’d appreciate any feedback.

Dark Web - Series Loline:

A directionless loser who commits small time robberies, for his mother and him so they don’t lose their house, is forcibly assimilated into a vast and dangerous dark web criminal organization, where he meets others with not much else but crime going for them, all while trying to be a better person, with the increasingly looming threat of his new crime boss.

(a crime comedy-drama)

“The Oshegutusha” - Episode Description:

Will Hornby, a directionless loser who commits small-time robberies, is forcibly assimilated into a vast and dangerous dark web criminal organization, where he meets others with not much else but crime going for them.

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