Thank you for the honest comment and agree with the need for more focus on the title/poem’s focus. I totally agree with the ”show not tell” idea and change will made, thank you.

As I said to @TotallyMeaCulpa this piece was very much an experiment, and I posted it to see what others thought of it, and not as a finished product. I responded to an idea proposed in class; the question of whether Virginia Woolf wrote a note before taking her own life? So, I quoted ’The Waves’ and frequently associated the piece with water, not only because she was oddly obsessed with it in her work but also that she ironically drowned herself in the Ouse River.

Could you suggest any specific parts that you found dry?

Thanks again for your time to comment :)