Thank you for your feedback. I understand what you are saying about the medias res, however I didn't really consider doing a whole thing on Anna's age or location or the severity of the weather within this excerpt as it is taken from a longer piece of writing. I also assumed that the reader would understand that from a child's perspective, two weeks would be a long time cooped up in a house. From my POV, I felt that I did try to avoid show not tell and passivity as I am not telling the reader that Anna is lonely, withdrawn, and is growing from childhood to adolescence, I am showing that through her disinterest in her toys when she tries to play with them, her fear of going to talk to her father, and trying to lighten the mood when engaging with her mother. If I have not done this, how do I approach this more successfully with these specific sections in mind?