3. Can you please critique the first part of my first chapter?

Can you please critique the first part of my first chapter?

Hi. Because your reply has led me to believe that you're probably aged between 11 and15 I'm going to respond to you quite gently.

I spent my time, as a favour to you, reading your work and providing very useful feedback.

And honestly you're a cunt for not finishing it. I'm sorry that you have a short attention span and can't read a fucking paragraph. But I don't appreciate your unnecessary and frankly condescending remarks about my writing.

Wow. Just wow. You asked for critique. You posted your work, asking for critique but you don't appreciate my remarks. Why on earth did you post it for critique?

If I take the time out of my luxurious and fabulous life to present you with my work of art

You didn't take time out of anything. You wanted to present something and asked for the help of anybody willing to give up time out of their day to give you help. I did my best to provide you with help. I did you the favour, not the other way around.

It's a rough draft so don't take it so seriously

Then why the hell are you posting it for people to critique? So that we can look at an unfinished, unedited, lazy-mistake filled piece of writing and waste time on something that's impossible to enjoy but that the author doesn't want feedback on? Why do you think that this is something for which you can

I'm sorry that I spent 20 minutes reading your material and showing you how to improve it. When people present something for critique, they usually actually want critique. You clearly didn't want critique at all, you just wanted praise and a pat on the head. That's childish.

If you don't understand constructive feedback or the problems lying within your writing, then raging and throwing your rattle out of the pram is your best option I suppose. I don't know why you'd find my comments condescending; I'm telling you that your writing is unreadable until you fix the kind of errors that I didn't make since I was about 8 or 9 years old. Now that is condescending. It's also true. Consider that you might not be as good as you think you are, and then work on improving. Everyone can improve.

I'll be sure to avoid critiquing anything you post for critique in the future since you evidently are not interested in critique.

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