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I'm writing Volume 3. Volume 1 and 2 are free on Kindle Unlimited.

Volume 1 Volume 2

CULT Group Coffee Sequence is a mystical space yarn for lovers of psychedelic science fiction. 

CULT Group, a corporate entity shrouded in mystery and connected somehow to humans' colonization of Mars, is promising the impossible. It claims that the human mind can be separated from the body via a strange VR-like process called Sequencing. If CULT Group's claims check out, then human beings might just be able to cheat death. 

Could disembodied immortality be at last within humanity's grasp? Or is CULT Group full of beans? The mysterious Participant sets out to investigate. 

Of Bots and Beans introduces readers to the reclusive actress Dame Saffron Von Scruplescotch, the fumbling Director Jerubimbo Gripebagger, the mysterious Participant, the eccentric ideas of Sir Francis Buildobare, and the ever-present metamorphic nanobiotech bots crawling all over everything. 

Of Bots and Beans is a Kindle Unlimited short read SF fans won't want to miss.

Phobos Eclipse of the Heart picks up the wild tale where Of Bots and Beans left off. 

Follow the mysterious Participant's continuing misadventures in Sequencing. Learn about The Scullythorne Thesis, an authoritative document which can be twisted into providing support for any and every argumentative perspective. Uncover a nefarious plot to bring down the Dos Boletos facility. Mourn the tragic end of Sir Francis Buildobare and the loss of the Vladimarino Gripebagger Expedition. Puzzle over the controversial Alley Cat Initiative. 

Revel in the mysteries of the nanobot-haunted Cosmos!

Volume 1 Volume 2

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