Lots of fun stuff in this poem. Right off the bat you've got the great game/domain, but I wish the rhyme was echoed in the next couple of lines? I kept reading shifts in line one and mischief in line three and my brain wants so bad for it to sync up, maybe that's just my problem. Rhymes come fast and loose throughout the poem, which can be exciting. It kept me on my toes when reading, as you aren't always sure if you've got an alternating rhyme with every couplet, and it's playful and fun. I kept having the same problem, though, and that's that I'd get a little lost. The character in this poem is a thief, veiled, and so I don't think it's entirely a bad thing for the very poem itself to feel elusive, but I'd really like a little more formatting just to give me a little more direction. Reading the other comments here indicates to me that you're having some trouble with reddit's formatting, which is entirely fair, but I might try and break the poem into a few stanzas. Giving it some structure and breaking it up into different acts can let you really hone in on the tone and form of the poem. Maybe you end up preferring one, long poem in the end, but it might help just to pick the poem apart a little to figure out how all the pieces fit together?