should i add i know this is a piece of literary fiction and i'll be pitching to boutique publishers?

try this instead:

Short on edge, Danny suicides his beloved grandmother and runs to Laos in order to “short cut” becoming an artist. We're pretty sure she was ready to die. Downriver on opium and yaba, during Tet new year's celebration on the top of the mountain, he winds up stepping on a landmine after which during recovery he writes the book he’s been wanting to write— only to lose the manuscript during a relapse. His local bartender sends him to Peru— the exact opposite side of the world from Mount Zinnalo— to the Nazcan desert, to recover on ayahuasca, but something happens, where he is no longer himself but two people.

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