Good afternoon!

Been thinking about reworking my summary thanks to the recent threads about what turns people off on a story before they click into it. This is where I have landed. When coupled with the following tag set, does it work? Thanks!

Tags:Alternate Universe - Modern Setting, Interns & Internships, Summer Romance, Strangers to Lovers, Coming Out, Getting Together, Fluff, Other Additional Tags to be Added

Proposed summary:Giyu thought he'd find only grueling work and bad bosses at his summer internship. He didn't think he'd find someone like Sabito.

Background info/context:This is meant to be a summer romance / coming-out story. Giyu is out, Sabito is not, and the general plot is they get to know each other, develop their latent attraction to each other, culminating in Sabito coming out to Giyu and them getting together.

In case it helps, this is the current summary. I know there is something off about it but I haven't been able to put my finger on what.

Sabito, who’s new to the city, has it all: smarts, confidence, a good heart, good looks. And also a secret: he’s closeted.

Giyu is a city boy with a lot still to learn: how to drive, how to ride a bike. He doesn’t think he has anything to teach anyone until he meets Sabito.