I am posting this from a new throwaway account because I don't want my erotica and romance pen names to be associated with each other. I published my first romance novel this week and it couldn't be going worse. I have what I think is a decent cover and blurb, and I wrote what I think is actually a good book. One of my reviews called it a "credible" debut. But there is clearly a problem somewhere and I am hoping I will be able to identify it before I publish my next one. I am thinking the problem might be choosing too large a pond to be in (cocky bad boy billionaire) but that feels like an excuse to not try to figure out where my concrete mistakes are. Anyone feel like looking at my blurb? I've changed it a couple of times since the book went live. I was hesitant to change it because I got great feedback on the original version. Anyway, here it is...

boldHe's rich. Arrogant. Dirty-talking. And the new superintendent of my building.bold

italicsMollyitalics

I'm just a girl from Brooklyn, and I've worked hard for what I have. With my dream job and my first apartment, I don't have time to be messing around with the cocky know-it-all who just landed in my building.

Too bad I can't get him out of my head.

boldThey call me the bad boy of commercial real estate, and it's a title I've earned. I'm used to getting what I want.bold

italicsDrewitalics

Heiresses. Supermodels. Even a professional ballerina or two. Hell, half of New York City has been tangled up in my sheets.

But Molly is different. She isn't like every rich girl in this city. Which makes me want her even more.

When my life completely implodes, I go into hiding by taking a gig as a building superintendent. Crazy, right? I could buy and sell this building without even lifting a finger. I've always been good with my hands.

It turns out that I might have to do something even crazier to win her over.