rinse and repeat

silent banshee is oxymoronic

"dark" contrasts with the next line's "roaring" and "spark"

"spark" continues into next line "flame" which conjures images of a flame disappearing as it's 'caught' by water

"one in a million they said that I was best" refers to a "they" who misinformed the speaker

"just stare at the moon, it would be over soon" what will be over soon? life? the night?

"don't you dare cry you hold your face " is stream of consciousness self-talk

"respect or mace

a faceless face" not sure the connection here, disrespect = mace? faceless face is overtly oxymoronic

" a souless womb" typo probably

"a lying child" continues from "womb"

"a weighted hold" unsure of this

"just go just stand" is a contradictory command

the rest of the poem features the repetition of "feel not", basically saying 'get on with it'

there's repetition of form which fits with the "rinse and repeat" title

for example, the first three lines repeat, 'a NOUN VERB':

a silent banshee left out in dark

a roaring meadow has no spark

a flame thrown in water expects no catch

i think this lacks cohesion. i suggest you the poem to more limited scenes/ideas or clarify using stanzas. i think the first 3 lines feature strong imagery, and the repetition is effective at producing a "rinse and repeat" feel to the reading.

thanks for sharing!

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