Hello Sir,
I am not a part of the "esports and gaming industry" but, I am a person in the professional business world. In my position I've hired my share of people for the companies in my day. Your trying to get into a much more cutthroat industry than mine with fewer positions available it's not going to be easy to try to break in. While I'm not going to fully analyze every single part of what you said, I will give you some very real-world advice. I'm not fully going to explain why to some of these things it just is how it is. I honest to god really don't have to time for that. Read online more into what I'm about to say say, ask someone or just figure it out. Some of this may sound very harsh but, that's the business world for you. I guarantee you that almost any employer will look at this the same way I am. I like your enthusiasm and I just want to see you do well.
Before I even get into the Letter itself:
1.Your already gambling by writing a personal letter to companies. Some may enjoy it, some may not. Consider turning this into more of a professional cover letter it's up to you.
2.Part meaning their is more? This is already to long. You need to greatly condense this. Employers are busy they aren't going to read all of this.
Now to the letter!
-"I’ve got a degree in sale, service and marketing, and been working for a couple of years as a computer and mobile sales man; which I was really good at. Right now, I’m a deckhand onboard a ship, so I do have a lot of spare-time. My hobbies in life are photography and security; which I’ve been working with for the past 7 years. I recently got headhunted to a security company where I’m a bodyguard and security officer."
Woah there! You switch career fields a lot automatic red flag. You being a deckhand/security guard and your hobbies are 100% irreverent to the industry your applying for.
"And of course, my huge passion for esports and gaming. My addiction started 10-12 years ago with counter-strike, and I’ve never got rid of it. So for about 10 years I’ve been working for and with some of the greatest teams and organization esports got to offer. I’ve been a news writer for team9, clan-IT and Team Begrip, and in the later years when I got more mature I became an agent/manager for an UK based agency and a team called NoA. "
well for starters you just started a paragraph with and, this letter would already be in the garbage at this point. You need to rephrase to parts about "your addiction" the whole thing sounds really unprofessional. The news writer part belongs in the 1st paragraph as it is 100% related to the industry your applying for.
-"There are not many things here in the world I can brag about being very good at, but my passion, enthusiasm and drive for esports and gaming are huge. I know I’ve got a lot to bring to the table in for of organizing, public relations and I would see myself as a social asset to your company. As a person, I am a very happy, social and energetic guy, and I believe I master english very well. I love to travel, organize and to meet new people; and because of my good relations with others, I’ve been able to build a network around the globe."
This isn't bad but, give less filler and more examples about how how you have these skills and how you plan on bringing them to the table.
-By this application I was hoping for a job where I can evolve as a person, as a business man, and to become a good representative amongst the people I admire so much. I have an extreme passion and enthusiasm for esports, and I will do my very best to ensure that I deliver all the expectations you have. I know that you are a growing- and a professional company, and I will do my very best that your visions, goals and policies will be worked on for many years to come.
This way to similar to your last paragraph. Combine them or something just too much filler.
And their is ALOT more if I was to really nitpick. Just trying to help you move in the proper direction.