The straight ahead imagery is on point. My only qualm is actually the whole pity-pit thing... which honestly considering is a good sign. Apart from the kind of natural following question of “but y?!” which is funny but a bit inappropriate in context, these kind of concept oriented titles usually have their drawbacks, and the general image you’re left with— imagining what was self(im assuming)-pity now being just a pit is relevant I suppose, but not exactly creatively inspired. Mainly in the fact that it was a concept-oriented poetic conclusion. And the thing is, I know something like that can be the driving idea behind applying yourself toward poetic writing, but the other side of that coin is that it is based in abstraction, and therefore doesn’t hit the reader in a very deeply felt way, you see what I’m saying? That analogy could be approached more metaphorically and therefore viscerally and have a more intriguing kind of impact, honestly like much of the symbolic imagery you did use. Good work though!