Hullo. Did read the first one, can't remember if I commented or not? I could go check but hey, I'm lazy.

First thing: somewhere in these other comments you mention that you like the preface and the thing is, ideologically, I like it too. But as a reader, I just don't care. I'm a pretty stubborn reader, and I had to all but force myself to read the preface, trying to reason whether or not other people would read through it. All I can say for sure is that if I were reading this for fun and not for critique, I would not have read it under any circumstances. It's like I can't control my aversion to things like that.

That being said, to me, the reader, it makes no difference if you keep it or not; it doesn't hinder my reading. Just know that I, the reader, did not read a word of it, and perhaps did not even register it as anything but a dedication or the like.

Now I'm gonna hop right down to my last comment on the doc, obnoxiously rescribed here:

Okay, now I find this very interesting. But being an obnoxious butt, I want to know what exactly he's suffering from - or, I guess, a reassurance that you have something already in mind.

Specifically, it's referring to Gordan's inability to distinguish whether the car is his or someone else's. Now, the taking things literal thing - that can be within the statistically average range of the human brain, but whether or not you intended it, I read the car thing as something else entirely.

That being said, I did read your original version, and in that one I didn't read anything but a lonely and somewhat maladjusted man. I didn't read any sort of cognitive disorder, which it seems here like Gordan may be suffering from. And I'm gonna be honest: I find this way more interesting. Perhaps because it'll give me a reason to sympathize with Gordan? Perhaps because I'm just really interested in mental health? Who knows.

Whichever way you intended it, I can only say that I would very much like an interesting depiction of a mental health disorder.

Anyway, enough of my selfish readerly demands.

I do agree with sboyd1982 in that the relationship between Gordan and Alina seems oddly comfortable - partially because of the way you write dialogue (which, by the way, is very enjoyable). But since your dialogue reads so naturally, it feels like the characters fit together naturally. And in this case, they don't; or rather, perhaps, shouldn't.

Anyway. Feel free to pick my brain for more, but that's what I've got off the top of my head.